The forbidden cave

WALT: Plan our mystery narrative

	SELF	Teacher
I have written an orientation that introduces setting, time and characters	YES
I have a problem, resolution and ending	YES
I have used sequencing words between events	YES
I have written in past tense	YES
My sentences make sense and I have correct punctuation - beginning and end

A few years ago in an isolated area there was a family. The family lived in an old house in the middle of the bush.  That house was haunted with a dead body underneath it. Their parents Anzac and Te Rangimarie told their children Matariki and Janala to never look or go into the cave.

One night Matariki and Janala were asleep in the bedroom when suddenly Janala heard a sound ‘Boom! Boom!  She got up silently and walked down stairs. As she got to the bottom of the stairs she opened the back door and  stepped out into the darkness. Janala peered out into the darkness.  The stillness echoed her name. “Janala come in here”.  She looked into the dark scary cave, ‘Boom! boom!’ she heard the sound  again. Janala followed the sound into the cave.

A  few minutes later, Matariki woke up and looked out the window and his brain froze. He was filled with terror when he saw Janala slowly walk into the cave. Matariki quickly jumped out of bed and ran down stairs and out the door as fast as he could, but it was too late.  Matariki needed  to fight  the monster.  In goes Matariki “Janala, Janala, Janala come out come out wherever you are!” he said in a  loud voice.

Out of nowhere he heard a big Roraroaroroarooraroooroaoraroaroror!  Stomping toward him was the biggest and ugliest monster.  It roared as loud as it could. Matariki searched and searched but he couldn’t find Janala.

Suddenly, mum and dad appeared.  “Get to bed RIGHT now” they scream at the monster.  Then they turned to Matariki. “You are grounded! We told you not to go into the cave”.  “I came to get Janala “ Matariki said.  Just then Janala comes around the corner.  “We told you not come in here” shouts Dad.  

“You two a grounded for a year.  I’ve spoken.  Now get to bed”.  “Yes mum” they both reply.